Haiku and Travis McGee

Traditional haiku is seventeen syllables, three lines whose length is five, seven, and five. The haiku should juxtapose three distinct but related ideas in search of a deeper truth.

Travis McGee

In a bright blue sky

Anchored in a silver slip

Floats the Busted Flush

Mystery fans who have read John McDonald's Travis McGee novels will recognize the reference to a boat, the Busted Flush, that Travis Mcgee, "salvage consultant" lived aboard. 

My criticism of my haiku is that it should be separate ideas, and not read like a single thought.

A second try, still not quite.
Okay

Its only okay

Because we believe it so

Or because it is

Haikus traditionally deal with nature.

In the dark green woods
Among meadows, trees and trails
I heard my footfalls

November Days

Cold November days
Wind blows from the frosty north
Winter comes too soon

Among the best Japanese haiku authors is Matsuo Basho.

He breaks form on occasion, as in A Cold Rain Starting.

A cold rain starting
And no hat-
So?

The point of this exercise is, I suppose, the idea that good writers get to the point.