Travis McGee
In a bright blue skyAnchored in a silver slipFloats the Busted Flush
Mystery fans who have read John McDonald's Travis McGee novels will recognize the reference to a boat, the Busted Flush, that Travis Mcgee, "salvage consultant" lived aboard.
My criticism of my haiku is that it should be separate ideas, and not read like a single thought.
A second try, still not quite.
Okay
Among the best Japanese haiku authors is Matsuo Basho.
He breaks form on occasion, as in A Cold Rain Starting.
A second try, still not quite.
Okay
Haikus traditionally deal with nature.Its only okayBecause we believe it soOr because it is
In the dark green woodsNovember Days
Among meadows, trees and trails
I heard my footfalls
Cold November days
Wind blows from the frosty north
Winter comes too soon
Among the best Japanese haiku authors is Matsuo Basho.
He breaks form on occasion, as in A Cold Rain Starting.
A cold rain startingThe point of this exercise is, I suppose, the idea that good writers get to the point.
And no hat-
So?